Your article felt to me as if you were speaking to a small group of struggling writers rather than just one person. I say you got the tone spot on.
I agree with what you say, I wrote a post a while ago The World I Want for My Daughter although I write it with parents in mind I also hoped my daughter would read it one day. She is only 1 at the moment. It got a good response so you theory definitely works.
Another brilliant read, thank you.